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Finn-the-Huck's avatar

This is totally cool and I can feel the passion that went into this.

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Danny Maldonado's avatar

Thanks man! It's means a lot. Everyone absolutely put a lot of effort into it.

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Alucard's avatar

Really well done bro! I'm IN the book!

Cool plot too :)

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Danny Maldonado's avatar

Ay I'm glad you like it.

My bigge struggle on Substack is I feel like my work comes across too serious. I don't mind being serious, but I'm not that serious in real life. I feel like I was able to express some more playfulness here. Ostran's actor really helped with that.

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Celi's avatar

Enjoying this series, need episode 3 soon!

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Danny Maldonado's avatar

Thanks, it's in the works!

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Martin Garcia's avatar

I enjoyed the story and I felt many of the emotions that Ibra was described as feeling.

This was fun.

Ostran is voiced by a great actor and I enjoyed him immensly.

I liked the freedom some of the voice actors made to make it more personal, more fluid.

The sounds were very fun and made me feel more immersed. It shows the time you put in!

The hairy chairs were weird, but in a good way, ya know?

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While reading along I noticed a piece of sentence was missing in the audio:

Ibra was dumbstruck.

MISSING PART -> He had rushed aboard the first ship leaving home

his mind was preoccupied with chasing the opportunity to race and keeping Quetzle safe during travel.

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Danny Maldonado's avatar

Thanks Martin. I was laughing the whole time I was editing Ostran's dialog. Everyone did great, I honestly wasn't expecting it to turn out this well.

And Dang, thanks for pointing that out. I'll have to try to record that line and insert it in.

Lol i hope living fur never becomes a real thing.

Thanks for the feedback. It means a lot that you take the time to leave detailed comments. These larger projects leave a lot of room for things to get missed.

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