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Hellish Views - Harry Evans's avatar

Dude, so many standout phrases. I love the final line! I look forward to reading more.

Martin Garcia's avatar

Danny! congratulations on the success! That is awesome and it makes me happy.

I felt icky thinking of ants inside my body crowding it up but the idea is cool! Sometimes it feels like that - so many of them come rushing out but which one to concentrate on?

I also really liked, "legs run, / like melted wax" the first line makes me think of people in a group rushing to a goal but then it flips it, a pulling down due to nature (gravity).

Cool stuff, Hope all is well for you!

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